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i can't decide

which way to turn
what door to choose
which bridge to burn

you're making things

too hard to handle
too much to take
i can't hold on

i'm losing my grip

the edge is wet
and my fingers begin
to slip

i wish

that you would
take my hand
pull me up
just say the words

i long to hear

foolish yes
but that's my
prayer

so save me now
i'm losing grip

my fingers slip
©2004-2009 ~bluevelouria
:iconbluevelouria:

Author's Comments

i don't know why but i really like this piece. i'd love some feed back. both positive and negative welcome.

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:iconlaketh:
Very nice, and emotional, keep up the good work.
:iconmoonysreturn:
so yay! i like it! though it's sad. ^^: nice job though.
:iconlaketh:
You're very welcome
:iconbluevelouria:
thanks. and yeah i was sad when i wrote it.
:iconevildeathpenguin:
It's so sad and so emotional and so WOW!!! I've got a feeling that a lot of my fav poems will be coming from here! ^-^

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I got an idea, an idea so smart my head would explode if I even began to know what I was talking about.
:iconbluevelouria:
aww thank you so much brie!
:iconeternalpain:
whoa ................... i really like this .......

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...Is that a monkey on your head?

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February 15, 2004
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